Blog #12

Part 1: Reflection on Writing Center (Not Final)

This week was good in the writing center. A woman came in with a paragraph about influences of school groups and how they affect teens. It was interesting because the paragraph was for an English class and she could barely speak English. When the tutor tried to explain things to her about her paragraph she could barely understand him so it was difficult for her to completely comprehend what he was talking about. He had to write down what he was talking about so that she could understand it. It helped me learn how to teach people that don’t speak English how to write. It is hard for them to understand our language let alone write it down on paper. Her grammar was very off, which also made it difficult because half of her paragraph was full of errors. I learned how to look for differences in papers that ESL students write compared to students whose first language is English. I learned that it is difficult for ESL students to get their points across correctly in their writing so we helped her put her thoughts together and then separate them which then helped her understand her own thoughts to write down. This week at the writing center helped me understand how to help students whose English language isn’t their first language.

Part 2: Final Portfolio Preparation

Something that I worked on this semester that I think I should include in my writing portfolio is audience awareness because for the SCA animal project I had to change my audience to college students and that was difficult for me to do even though I am a college student. Another writing piece I worked on was sentence level revision, I believe this should be in my portfolio because I believe I have improved my sentence structure since the beginning of this semester. I have learned a lot about different sentence structures and what to add or take out of sentences. Some pieces I think that I could add into the portfolio is the tri-fold because that was the main thing I had to do to aim to a certain audience which was college students. Another piece is my first blog compared to my final blog because my writing has formed into something better than my first blog. Another could be a piece from my junior writing portfolio, and I believe this would be a good piece because most of my pieces in my junior writing portfolio are from last year or even later than that. It would show how much my writing has formed also.

Blog #11

Community Partner Draft Annotations

During the presentation I am going to focus on college students and informing them about Second Chance Animal and how they can help. I want and hope that students will volunteer and try to help them also. The reason Morgan and I chose to do a bullet points was because most college students will grab flyers and throw them away probably because there are too many words on it, we chose bullet points to get straight to the point so that college students will stay interested. It is hard on a college campus because some students love looking through all of the tables and what they have, but some just walk right by so we chose a lot of pictures also to help attract college students. I hope by students reading and looking through the tri-fold they will become interested and want to learn more about Second Chance Animal and even try to volunteer time with SCA. But if students aren’t interested in helping, we put facts so that they become more informed about spay and neutering animals. We put information about SCA when you open up the tri-fold to help students become more informed; we kept their mission, about them, and company overview the same that they know exactly what SCA is trying to do. This tri-fold is meant to get SCA name out there so the college campus is aware of what they are trying to do and inform them more on spay and neutering animals.

Some questions I have for Georgia are:

Does the formatting look okay for her standard?

Is the saying on the front of the pamphlet okay because I changed it around a little bit to make a sentence?

Where does she think we should put the website for the facts I got?

Anything else she think we should add?

Blog #10

Part 1: Reflection

This week in the writing center I learned how to write a lab report the correct way. It was interesting to me because I have never written a long report that included an abstract, introduction, methods, steps, materials, results and conclusion. I have never written an abstract before and that was what was the most helpful for me and interesting. I learned that it is a summary of everything included in the paper combined into one paragraph at the beginning of the paper. Another thing I learned was that usually in a lab report you want to avoid using "we" in the paper because since you are usually doing the paper in a group you are bound to use "we" a lot and I learned that that isn't the proper way to write a lab report and usually the reader doesn't like that included.

Part 2: Community Partner Draft Annotations

Facts about spay and neutering

• 10% of animals picked up by shelters have been spayed or neutered
• 2% of stray cats are spayed or neutered 
• On average, fertile cats produce one to three litters a year; and average between four to six kittens per litter
• On average, fertile dogs produce one litter a year; and average between four to six puppies per litter
• Dog owners report 76% have spayed and neutered their dogs
• Cat owners report 87% have spayed or neutered their cats

http://www.aspca.org/about-us/-april/the-facts-about-spay-neuter.aspx

I think these facts work out great for the tri-fold but I think I could add more facts but don't know exactly

what else to add? These work out great because it is informing college students about spay and 

neutering their animals and some quick facts. 

Blog #9

Part 1: Reflection

Today in the writing center, the tutor and I worked with a slower person which taught me a lot because the way the tutors helped them really made me realize another way to look at my writing. The tutor looked carefully at their writing and instead of just reading over and focusing on one thing; they focused on helping them through the assignment and look closely at it. The student was much focused on getting the paper to be a good grade and kept saying that but the tutor was more about trying to help the student with the paper and put it in his own words. One thing I learned in the writing center was adding examples to descriptions. It helped me realize I can add a lot more to my papers to help it make more sense and add support.

Part 2: Community Partner Progress

This is what we have so far:

·         Working on getting a table for CUB to help inform college students about spay and nurturing and second chance animal

·         Working on tri-fold to give out also at table informing same thing

·         Tri-fold include:               

o   Second chance animal information

§  Contact information (e-mail, twitter, facebook, phone, etc.)

§  Mission statement

§  Description of what they do

§  Company overview

o   Spay and nurturing information

o   Pictures

o   Logo

·         Kaycee is going to bring her dog to table to bring attention to us

·         Main focus: inform college students

·         Still need to work on tri-fold though

* Maybe make a donation jar for change?

 

Blog #8

Part 1: Reflection

This week during my internship we went over a cover letter with a student. The peer tutor taught the student how to write a cover letter and also the outline what each part should look including, name, company name, greetings, then what each paragraph consists of, and then ending the letter. It reminded me of what a cover letter is supposed to look like and after i went back and looked at my cover letter to make sure I did it correctly. The peer tutor asked if that was what mine looked like and I told him it did because that was what you taught us in class. It is so interesting how much our class is working with the internship, it is helping me pull things together and understand concepts better.

Part 2: Community Partner Project

In class, my group and I talked about who the audience would be and that would be college students because we are on a college campus full of college students. We also talked about a fundraiser or having a table set up in the CUB. The table would consist of a tri-fold just with information about Second Chance Animal, information about what they do, and how the college student could help maybe? Kaycee had a great layout of the tri-fold and what it would consist of. Also with the table set-up Kaycee offered to bring her dog which she adopted to help attract college students to the table. And then also adding a poster that we could put on the table with information about Second Chance Animal, and then about spay and nuturing and how to help animals.

Blog #7

Part 1: Revision

Before:

Media portrays Teen pregnancy daily on a show on MTV and it is starting to become a common thing around our culture today. I believe people should know more about this topic because the issue of teen pregnancy plays a huge role in teen’s lives today and is a life changing event in a teens life. There are many things teens don’t think about when becoming pregnant, and teens need to be aware, before getting pregnant, of what the consequences are of bringing a child into this world.

After:

Media portrays teen pregnancy daily on a show on MTV called "Teen Mom" and it is starting to become a common thing around our culture today. I believe people should know more about this topic because the issue of teen pregnancy plays a huge role in teen’s lives today and is a life changing event in a teens life. There are specific consequences teens don’t think about when becoming pregnant, and teens need to be aware, before getting pregnant, of what the consequences are of bringing a child into this world.

The changes I made were very small but I changed some words around to help my paragraph become more specific to my topic and straight to the point.

Part 2:

My group talked about PSAs for Georgia to consider. The questions we talked about asking her were:

• What points do you want to get across to your audience?
• Volunteering? Spending time with the animals?
• Main focus?
• Who do you want your audience to be?
• Maybe talk about:
• shelter benefits
• volunteering
• spay and neutured
• another event coming up?

Part 3: Revision of Previous Blog

Active: This chapter will help me in the future because it will help me keep writing straight forward again because sometimes you don’t need those extra word as seen in active writing therefore as in passive writing you don’t need the support it is straight to the point and you still understand.

Passive: This chapter helped me because it will help me realize extra words I don't need and it is straight to the point and not needing support.

I chose this because I am still dragging sentences on and mixing up active and passive.

Blog #6

Part 1: In the writing center I learned more about grammar, and also the tutor I was working with talked about connecting sentences which was what we talked about on Wednesday in class. The student we were working with was an ESL student and her thoughts were kind of all over the place and the tutor helped her put her sentences together and link her thoughts together to help the paper make more sense. And then I also helped a little by helping her link sentences. I thought it was great that our class and the internship are working together because it is really helping me understand the class and with my writing.

Part 2:

Before:

The contemporary issue I chose to talk about is teen pregnancy. The reason I chose this topic is because media portrays this on a daily show on MTV and it is starting to become a common thing around our culture today. I believe people should know more about this topic because this issue plays a huge role in teen’s lives today and it is a life changing event in a teens life it is does happen. There are many things teens and people don’t think about when becoming pregnant, and teens need to be aware, before getting pregnant, of what the consequences are of bringing a child into this world is about.

After corrections: 

Media portrays Teen pregnancy daily on a show on MTV and it is starting to become a common thing around our culture today. I believe people should know more about this topic because the issue of teen pregnancy plays a huge role in teen’s lives today and  is a life changing event in a teens life. There are many things teens don’t think about when becoming pregnant, and teens need to be aware, before getting pregnant, of what the consequences are of bringing a child into this world.

Part 3: I focused on reconstructing my sentences to help them tie together and link up. I also fixed my sentence structure by deleting little words that were not needed. By fixing this paragraph, it has helped me really understand chapter 6 and linking sentences together because you don't want to rant which I usually do so by going back to old work and realizing what I was doing has helped me really understand how to change my paper. After all the changes I made on this paper, it makes more sense and now is straight to the point with also linking my paragraph together.