Blog #6

Part 1: In the writing center I learned more about grammar, and also the tutor I was working with talked about connecting sentences which was what we talked about on Wednesday in class. The student we were working with was an ESL student and her thoughts were kind of all over the place and the tutor helped her put her sentences together and link her thoughts together to help the paper make more sense. And then I also helped a little by helping her link sentences. I thought it was great that our class and the internship are working together because it is really helping me understand the class and with my writing.

Part 2:

Before:

The contemporary issue I chose to talk about is teen pregnancy. The reason I chose this topic is because media portrays this on a daily show on MTV and it is starting to become a common thing around our culture today. I believe people should know more about this topic because this issue plays a huge role in teen’s lives today and it is a life changing event in a teens life it is does happen. There are many things teens and people don’t think about when becoming pregnant, and teens need to be aware, before getting pregnant, of what the consequences are of bringing a child into this world is about.

After corrections: 

Media portrays Teen pregnancy daily on a show on MTV and it is starting to become a common thing around our culture today. I believe people should know more about this topic because the issue of teen pregnancy plays a huge role in teen’s lives today and  is a life changing event in a teens life. There are many things teens don’t think about when becoming pregnant, and teens need to be aware, before getting pregnant, of what the consequences are of bringing a child into this world.

Part 3: I focused on reconstructing my sentences to help them tie together and link up. I also fixed my sentence structure by deleting little words that were not needed. By fixing this paragraph, it has helped me really understand chapter 6 and linking sentences together because you don't want to rant which I usually do so by going back to old work and realizing what I was doing has helped me really understand how to change my paper. After all the changes I made on this paper, it makes more sense and now is straight to the point with also linking my paragraph together.