Part
1: Cover Letter Draft
My educational background has prepared me for the
role of a childcare provider. In
particular, my study of Children Psychology has given me a solid background so
that I can perform taking care of children, working in a professional manner,
and making sure all tasks are completed in a timely manner. I am eager to
contribute my enthusiasm and up-to-date skills to the Bellevue Athletic Club.
Part
2: Reading Response
In chapter 1, a concept that really helped me was in
the section Applying Conversational
Guidelines, the part about being relevant. This section will help me as a
writer because sometimes in my papers I like to rant or get off topic somehow.
In this section it talks about just sticking straight to point instead of
rambling and this will help me because I need to stay on point and keep the
topic going. I need to make sure I am not rambling but keeping on point.
In chapter 2, a concept that really helped me was
this whole chapter but specifically Choosing
a Verb section because in class when we talked about weak words like is,
had, has, have, etc I noticed that I use those words most of the time. This chapter
will help me get straight to the point without the “worthless” words I usually
add in to make my paper go longer. This chapter will help me find a more “action-oriented”
verb to replace all the “wordiness” in my paper.
Part
3: Revision of Part 1
. This chapter will help me get straight to the
point without the “worthless” words -- I usually add in -- to make my paper go
longer.
You stated a lot of good points; using weak verbs can make it seem like you are using the same words over and over. Replacing those weak verbs with a more stronger verb can make your sentence sound more professional. On Part 3; instead of saying "to make my paper go longer", I would take out the word "go".
ReplyDeletestaying on point in a paper is hard to do somtimes esspesialy when trying to meet a page requirment for a class. but its a key thing when trying to keep the reader intrested.
ReplyDeleteI tend to get off subject in papers sometimes as well. Like others have said, I think it happens most when we are trying to meet a requirement of pages that we just cant seem to fill up. I've found it helpful to outline the main points you want to make first, as well as any sub categories that fall within those main points, then write, rather than just writing with a subject in mind. It seems to help me stay on topic a little better and helps out structurally as well.
ReplyDeleteOur discussion in class and chapter 2's discussion on verb choice is definitely really important. I never thought about it before but whenever I write I ALWAYS have a thesaurus open and am constantly seeing what words I can use to benefit my writing. One thing to keep in mind though is to not just try and fill your paper up with big words. I think it's important to choose verbs carefully so they still flow with the paper and the style of your writing.